You are improving, it`s better than the last video.
There is just one problem, and that is the FPS, it`s very low and it`s results in a not smooth movie, but beside that, ok movie

Maybe you should try to run lower graphics so it would be better flow in the video, of course the best would be to upgrade your hardware, but we can`t demand that since that is a querstion about money.
But when that is said, it`s better than the last one, so your going in right direction.

If you want to try something in movie maker use the smudge stick effect on videos or something with low quallity and high FPS. That worked for me and no one else could tell the diffrence