Thank you!
Here is another one I came up with while reading this thread:
Green lightning the start,
as thunder rages the pack,
silent engine dies.
A variation, with less action but more internal emphasis, would be:
With ruby moons above,
the drum of my heart deafens,
I still hold my breath.
I like the snapshot nature of haikus, so mine tend to be reality snapshots focused on subjective perception.
